读后续写亲情类--爸爸我可以跟你买1小时吗讲义-高三英语作文复习写作专项(1)

爸爸，我可以跟你买1小时吗？

A man came home from work late, tired and irritated(不耐烦的), to find his 5yearold son waiting for him at the door. “Daddy, may I ask you a question?” “Yeah sure, what is it?” replied the man. “Daddy, how much do you make an hour?”

“That’s none of your business. Why do you ask such a thing?” the man said angrily. “I just want to know. Please tell me. How much do you make an hour?” pleaded the little boy.

“If you must know, I make $20 an hour.”

“Oh,” the little boy replied, with his head down. Looking up, he said, “Daddy, may I please borrow $10?”

The father was angry, “If the only reason you asked that is that you can borrow some money to buy a silly toy or some other nonsense, then you march yourself straight to your room and go to bed. Think about why you are being so selfish. I work hard every day for such childish behavior.” The little boy quietly went to his room and shut the door. The man sat down and started to get even angrier about the little boy’s questions. “How dare he ask such questions only to get some money?”he thought to himself. After about an hour or so, the man calmed down, and started to think:Maybe there was something he really needed to buy with that $10 and he really didn’t ask for money very often. The man went to the door of the little boy’s room and opened the door. “Are you asleep, son?” he asked. “No, daddy, I’m awake,” replied the boy.

“I’ve been thinking, maybe I was too hard on you earlier,” said the man. “It has been a long day and I took out my anger on you. Here’s the $10 you asked for.”

The little boy sat straight up, smiling. “Oh. Thank you, daddy!” he yelled. Then, reaching under his pillow he pulled out some crumpled(皱巴巴的) bills. 注意:

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The man, seeing that the boy already had money started to get angry again.

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Not knowing what his son meant, the father just stood there, waiting for his boy’s explanation. 01故事梗概：

一位父亲很晚下班回家又累又躁，发现自己5岁的儿子正在等他。儿子问爸爸一小时赚多少，这加剧了父亲的愤怒。他觉得儿子自私不懂事，但还

是架不住儿子的再三询问，说20元。儿子失望地低下头，然后说能不能给他10元。父亲更加愤怒，把儿子赶进了房间。

等父亲冷静下来，他推门来到儿子边上，说不该对儿子那么严苛，并给了他10美元。儿子很开心，又掏出了邹巴巴的几张纸币。

para 1: 一看见儿子已经有钱，但还问他要，父亲的怒火又上来了。 para 2: 不清楚儿子的意思，父亲等待着儿子的解释。

02写作思路

（1）明确故事人物关系（characters）。故事中主要人物为父亲the man和他5岁的儿子the little boy。

（2）理清故事主要事件(events)。父亲工作很晚回到家；儿子问父亲工作一个小时多少钱并向他借10美元；父亲为此生了气并叫儿子回自己房间反思；父亲考虑后觉得儿子事出有因便最后借了这10美元给儿子。

（3）根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展（development）。故事总体的发展应该是儿子用他借的10美元和自己已有的零用钱买了父亲一个小时的时间，此件事情让父亲反思自己以前花太少的时间陪儿子了。续写第一段：根据第二段开头提示的句子，小男孩接下来的行为让父亲感到惭愧。所以可能是小男孩拿着借的钱给父亲买了份礼物，也可能是小男孩拿着向父亲借的钱和自己已有的钱买了父亲一个小时的时间。续写第二段：父亲为自己说过的话感到抱歉，可以写父亲之后用实际行动来弥补儿子，也可以写父亲开始反思以前太把重心放在工作上，而忽略了应多花点时间陪陪儿子。

（4）结合下划线词罗列写作要点（points）。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点：”What would the boy do after he got father’s $10.00? Would he just buy a silly toy or some other nonsense for himself just like what his father said? Would he do something special to his father?”等。第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：”How would the father feel after hearing what the boy said? What would the father do? What changes would the father make? ”等。 03参考答案

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The man, seeing that the boy already had money started to get angry again.“How can you be so selfish?Why do you want more money since you already have these bills?” the father could hardly hold hisanger back and inquired with two eyebrows knitted into one. With heldback tears in his eyes, the little boy slowly and carefully counted out his money, and then looked up at his father, replying, “Because I didn’t have enough before, but now I do.” with big blue eyes shining with tears.

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Not knowing what his son meant, the father just stood there, waiting for his boy’s explanation. Wiping away his tears and an innocent smile appearing on his face, the boy requested in a relieved voice, “Daddy, I have $20 now. Can

I buy an hour from you?Please e home early tomorrow. I want to have dinner with you.” Hearing the boy’s small but sincere request, the father couldn’t hold back his tears. Realizing he was too busy with his business to spare some time with his beloved ones, he gathered his son into his arms and apologized again and again, “Sorry..., and I promise I’ll be back early tomorrow.” 04下水文1 Paragraph 1:

The man, seeing that the boy already had so much money started to get angry again. “How can you be so selfish? Why do you want more money since you already have these bills?” The father could hardly hold his anger back and inquired with two eyebrows knitted into one. Holding back tears in his eyes, the little boy slowly and carefully counted out his money, and then looked up at his father, replying, “Because I didn’t have enough before, but now I do.” with big blue eyes shining with tears. Wiping away his tears and with an innocent smile appearing on his face, the boy requested in a relieved voice, “Daddy, I have $20 now. Can I buy an hour from you? Please e home early tomorrow. I want to have dinner with you.” Paragraph 2:

After hearing what the boy said, the father felt so sorry for what he had said to his son. Tears filled his eyes and he gave a deep hug to the son. In the past few years, he was always engaged in work and never spent a single weekend with his son. This $20 is just a short reminder to all of us working so hard for our living. Don’t let time slip through our fingers without having spent some quality time with those who really matter to us.

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The man, seeing that the boy already had money, started to get angry again. He grumbled why the boy now. Can I buy an hour of your time?\"

After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son. He burst into tears and hugged his son deeply. In the past few years, he has always been busy with work and has never spent a weekend with his son. This $20.00 is just a brief reminder to all of us who work hard for our lives. Don't let time slip through our fingers without spending good times with those who truly matter to us.

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The man, seeing that his son already had money, started to get angry again.The little boy slowly counted out his money, then looked up at his father.“Why do you want more money if you already have some ?” the father said.“Because I didn’t have enough, but now I do.” The little boy replied.“Daddy, I have $20 now. Can I buy an hour of your time? Please e

home early tomorrow. I would like to have dinner with you.”

After hearing what the boy said, the man felt so sorry for what he had said to his son.The father couldn’t hold back his tears. Realizing he was too busy with his business to spare some time with his beloved ones, he

gathered his son into his arms and apologized again and again, “Sorry..., and I promise I’ll be back early tomorrow.”The father was crushed he begged for his forgiveness. 语料库

1. suppress one's anger压抑怒火

2. strive to inquire in a calm voice努力用平静的语气询问 3. couldn't conceal one's overjoy无法压抑喜悦

4. express one's genuine gratitude in a delighted voice以愉悦的语气表达真挚的感激之情

5. make great sacrifice做出巨大的牺牲 6. stretch one's arms伸展胳膊

7. lock sb into one's tender embrace把某人紧紧地抱在怀里 8. tears of regret streaming down悔恨的泪水流了下来 9. it dawned on sb that...某人突然意识到

10. strike a good balance between ...and...在…之间取得良好的平衡